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'''Reviewer:''' '''''[[User:Theleftorium|< |
'''Reviewer:''' '''''[[User:Theleftorium|<span style="color:#AE0937;">The</span>]][[User talk:Theleftorium|<span style="color:#AD4740;">left</span><span style="color:#C6454E;">orium</span>]]''''' 12:57, 1 April 2010 (UTC) |
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Nice work on the article Hunter! Here's my suggestions: |
Nice work on the article Hunter! Here's my suggestions: |
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*Try to avoid repetition of the word "said" in the second and third paragraphs of the reception section |
*Try to avoid repetition of the word "said" in the second and third paragraphs of the reception section |
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*Can you move the quotation box to the left? The image above gets in the way. |
*Can you move the quotation box to the left? The image above gets in the way. |
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Good luck! :) '''''[[User:Theleftorium|< |
Good luck! :) '''''[[User:Theleftorium|<span style="color:#AE0937;">The</span>]][[User talk:Theleftorium|<span style="color:#AD4740;">left</span><span style="color:#C6454E;">orium</span>]]''''' 12:57, 1 April 2010 (UTC) |
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*Thanks Leftorium! I think I responded to everything. (It should have been "mixed reviews", not "positive mixed".) Let me know if there's anything else! — <b>[[User:Hunter Kahn|<span style="color:#C0C0C0;">Hun</span>]][[User talk:Hunter Kahn|<span style="color:#C0C0C0;">ter</span>]] [[Special:Contributions/Hunter_Kahn|<span style="color:#595454;">Ka</span>]][[User:Hunter Kahn/Autographs|<span style="color:#595454;">hn</span>]]</b> 14:05, 1 April 2010 (UTC) |
*Thanks Leftorium! I think I responded to everything. (It should have been "mixed reviews", not "positive mixed".) Let me know if there's anything else! — <b>[[User:Hunter Kahn|<span style="color:#C0C0C0;">Hun</span>]][[User talk:Hunter Kahn|<span style="color:#C0C0C0;">ter</span>]] [[Special:Contributions/Hunter_Kahn|<span style="color:#595454;">Ka</span>]][[User:Hunter Kahn/Autographs|<span style="color:#595454;">hn</span>]]</b> 14:05, 1 April 2010 (UTC) |
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**Nice work! I'll pass the article. '''''[[User:Theleftorium|< |
**Nice work! I'll pass the article. '''''[[User:Theleftorium|<span style="color:#AE0937;">The</span>]][[User talk:Theleftorium|<span style="color:#AD4740;">left</span><span style="color:#C6454E;">orium</span>]]''''' 14:11, 1 April 2010 (UTC) |
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Reviewer: Theleftorium 12:57, 1 April 2010 (UTC)
Nice work on the article Hunter! Here's my suggestions:
- "How About a Friendly Shrink?" received generally positive mixed reviews – Wouldn't "received mixed to positive reviews" sound better?
- lowest rating for an individual Desperate Housewives in series history – "the series' history"? (appears in the Reception section too)
- which he won't let Lynette read – "he will not let"
- what she's sure is – "she is"
- he can't reach – "he cannot"
- Gabrielle initially suspects her daughter Juanita + Susan is pleased that her son M.J. – will avoid confusion to people not familiar with the show (like myself)
- Angie takes an instant dislike to her son Danny's – same as above
- who is in the Leopards, are among the slow group – shouldn't this say "is among"?
- seems to understand what he's been through – "he has"
- the person she's become – "she has"
- Link Wisteria Lane
- The episode marked the return of
- when her character suffered a nervous breakdown – you can't say "when her character" because Katherine Mayfair is a character
- Reeves is the third former –> Leeves
- Link "rating" and "share" to Nielsen_ratings#Ratings/share_and_total_viewers
- Link You Gotta Get a Gimmick
- praised the episode, and said she was – no need for a comma here
- Try to avoid repetition of the word "said" in the second and third paragraphs of the reception section
- Can you move the quotation box to the left? The image above gets in the way.
Good luck! :) Theleftorium 12:57, 1 April 2010 (UTC)
- Thanks Leftorium! I think I responded to everything. (It should have been "mixed reviews", not "positive mixed".) Let me know if there's anything else! — Hunter Kahn 14:05, 1 April 2010 (UTC)
- Nice work! I'll pass the article. Theleftorium 14:11, 1 April 2010 (UTC)